Climate change is an important global issue. Rising temperatures, extreme weather events, and environmental loss hurt our planet. Individual actions (such as recycling and taking public transportation) are the solution to reducing climate change. Do you agree or disagree?

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contemporary life, the topic of climate change has gained in popularity, making a paradigm shift in human being's living conditions.
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many advantages may derive from personal
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in terms of alleviating
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phenomenon, it is believed that
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from other stakeholders
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hold imperative impacts.
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analyze
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the role of the governments and environmental organizations before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. On the one hand, the
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influence in mitigating climate-related problems is vital in every
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around the world. One perceived role of the officials is to launch
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campaigns in order to raise awareness among their population about natural disasters, which would change the viewpoints of the majority of the population.
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of smaller campaigns, workshops and seminars powered by individuals and private companies towards
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problem.
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of
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encouraging
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to take action is countries, especially those who have poor
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environments
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global warming. Since individual
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cannot have profound impacts on the planet or even can
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to several unwanted consequences
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the lack of complex knowledge about the big picture of the environment, a
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plan by the official which has
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realated
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related
aspects is highly beneficial in the long term.
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,
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by environmental organizations are crucial
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convincing reasons. The biggest one is these inspiring groups which launched by the young or well-known environmentalist would inspire a myriad of people, especially the youthful enthusiasts, to take
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actions
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the horizontal of the young but
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the growing trends towards global problems among the society, eventually
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younger generations to become
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responsible for events around the world.
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, organizations are
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active in
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problem which helps the government a lot. In conclusion, despite the merits
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derive from individual
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, the role of other stakeholders is needed to ensure the effectiveness of solutions aiming for solving
climate-realated
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climate-related
problems. It is,
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, hoped that not only individuals, the governments but
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more and more people will take steps to deal with
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internaltional
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international
scale problem at its root for a fresh environment.
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task achievement
Good job in analyzing the role of governments and environmental organizations. However, include clearer and more detailed examples to make your points more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'analazy' which should be 'analyze,' 'widen the horizontal' which needs to be 'broaden the horizon,' and 'internaltional' which should be 'international.'
task achievement
You have provided a clear and comprehensive response, considering various aspects of the topic, not just individual actions.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized with a strong introduction and conclusion that summarize your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured paragraphs with clear main points and supporting arguments, showing logical progression in your arguments.

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