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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desserts or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists to visit such places?

#tourists #places #conditions #sahara #desserts #antarctic #visit
The advancement that the world has made in terms of transportation and technology, has made travelling possible today
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 any part of the world.
Information sharing
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 platforms have created awareness of the go-to places for exploration with complete details
such
 as what to expect and how to prepare for travel.
This
 has encouraged people to travel to tough destinations. No matter if it is the hottest spot on earth with barren land or the coldest spot on
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, travelling is much easier and safer today than ever before. Travelling to uneasy places sounds challenging yet exciting and must be experienced often. The benefits of visiting terrains with difficult conditions
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 like moving away from the regular environment and routine lifestyle. The mind and body feel relaxed undergoing changes in living conditions. Consider
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someone
 living in a busy metro city like Karachi
visits
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 Okara, he would enjoy the clear clouds, green fields,
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 water from streams and would feel peaceful. At the same
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 there are
also
 some
disadvatages
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disadvantages
 associated with travelling to difficult places. The risk of being out of necessary supplies required for survival is the biggest threat, One of my
friend
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, Saad
while
 travelling by road to the
middle east
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Middle East
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 got his tank leaked and he ran out of drinking water. He had to travel far to reach a place where drinking water was
accessable
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accessible
. The situation was scary. Travelling is fun but all preparations are precautions must be met.
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear viewpoint and attempts to support it with relevant examples. However, ensure that all points are directly related to the topic. Include more specific examples and evidence to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing the essay better. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Use more cohesive devices to guide the reader through your essay smoothly.
task achievement
The introduction does a good job of setting up the topic and context of the essay. It clearly identifies the modern advancements making travel more accessible.
coherence cohesion
You maintain a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for benefits and disadvantages.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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