Nowadays, there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all around the world. What are the main causes for it? What can be a solution, in your opinion?

In
todays
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era, everyone is motivating
cleaner
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a cleaner
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city leading to
cleaner
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world. Many people believe that the garbage
percentile
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is increasing across the globe. In
this
essay
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I will discuss some of the crucial reasons for
this
drastic boom and
the
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some rectifications to overcome
this
challenge. The
population
is increasing everywhere. What I mean by
this
is in every family there are
atleast
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at least
four to five members. Each member
contribute
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to their part of the trash.
For example
, a study was conducted in 2022 which showed the increase in
population
in India by 23% in that year. The government can play an important role in controlling the
population
by regulating heavy fines and laws for
population
control.
In addition
to
this
families can
built
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a compost pit in their backyard and burn the
rubbish
themselves. Another popular reason for
increament
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increment
of
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in
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rubbish
is
consumption
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the consumption
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of plastic
bottles
. Many
household
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households
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buy more than 100
water
bottles
every month because they
dont
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don't
believe in tap
water
and the chemical composition in it.
For instance
, my neighbour Tina buys 3 cartons of
water
every month to promote
healthy
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lifestyle. A solution to
this
problem is switching to
water
filters at home, it is a
one time
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cost but saves people from throwing
rubbish
. On
the
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top of
this
people can
also
recycle
the
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apply
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bottles
in their
home
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. In conclusion, the major two causes of the increase in
rubbish
amount
is
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population
increase and using plastic
bottles
in households. The solution to the problems is
population
control with the help of authoritative bodies and
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the contruction
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contruction
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construction
of compost
pit
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pits
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, purchasing
water
filters and
to reuse
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reusing
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and
recycle
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recycling
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.
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