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The diagram below presents the producing process for making sugar out of sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below presents the producing process for making sugar out of sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The presented picture illustrates
way
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a way
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 of getting
sugar
 from
sugar
 canes through human-machine cooperation.
Overall
, there is one and only
ingredient
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one ingredient
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 (
sugar
 cane),
large
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a large
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 number of steps and several equipment (
combine
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combined
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 harvester, crusher, filter, evaporator, centrifuge and dry cooler)
that
is
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are
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 required to produce some
sugar
.
To begin
 with, the period for
sugar
 cane to grow is between 1-1,5
year
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years
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.
After
this
, the season of harvesting starts
due to
growth
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the growth
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 of
sugar
canes
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cane
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 are finished. Collecting the harvest might be completed in 2 ways,
such
 as by combine harvester or by
human
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humans
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. Crushing the
sugar
canes
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cane
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,
squishing
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and squishing
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 its juice is the next stage completed by
crusher
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the crusher
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 machine.
Thereafter
, retrieve-purified juice goes through
limestone
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a limestone
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 filter, making it to
evaporator
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the evaporator
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, heated below, where juice transforms into syrup.
Received
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The received
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 syrup moves to the centrifuge. Centrifuge’s main goal is to separate
sugar
 crystals from syrup.
Wet
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A wet
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 and hot substance called “
sugar
” gets dried and cooled in a specific piece of equipment.
Finally
, after drying and cooling, the production of
sugar
 is finished.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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