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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The given map illustrates the expansion of
particular
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a particular
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 town
nearby
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near
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 London
due to
 the population
increasing
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increase
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during
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from
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 1868 to 1994, especially in the
developtment
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development
 of various types of roads and neighborhood areas. Over the time period, there were circulations built in
nineteenth
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the nineteenth
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 era and four residential groups
surrounding
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surrounding them
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.
To begin
 with main road, it was mainly built to spread the not only city from north to south, but
also
 from west to east. After that, the primary changes were in the
constructions
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construction
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 of
railway
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the railway
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 and motorway. The former extended
south
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the south
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 part of the focus area from left to right side through Chorleywood station in 1970,
while
 the latter
were
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was
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 made
in
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on
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 the west side crossing with two above-mentioned roads by
traffic
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a traffic
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 circle on the upper part. Moving on to the village transformation history, they
were
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were initially located
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initially
 locate in the
center
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centre
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 from 1868 to 1883, before a scaling up to
southside
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the southside
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 between 1883 and 1922. After the railway was constructed, there
is
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was
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 the third residence pressed on two sides of the second in 1922.
Finally
,
due to
 the success of
motorway
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the motorway
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, the upper and lower east side were replaced by the final village in 1970.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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