The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.
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The given column graph illustrates the information about the top of the world three manufacturers of four different dairy
product
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products
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in 2012.
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it is clear that
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EU
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the EU
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is the highest column in
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group
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the group
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milk
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and
cheese
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. For
group
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butter,
India
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is higher than others and
China
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is the highest in
group
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Milk
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power. In
group
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milk
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and
cheese
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,
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EU
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the EU
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is the highest in the
group
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. In
group
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milk
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,
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EU
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the EU
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is heavier than
India
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15.97
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at 15.97
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metric
tons
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,
India
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is more
weight
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than UNITED
STATES
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36.962
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at 36.962
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metric
tons
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and
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EU
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the EU
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is more
weight
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than UNITED
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52.939
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at 52.939
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metric
tons
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. In
group
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cheese
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,
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EU
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the EU
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is heavier than
UNITED
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the UNITED
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STATES
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2.195
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at 2.195
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metric
tons
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,
UNITED
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the UNITED
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STATES
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is more
weight
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than BRAZIL
4.225
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at 4.225
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metric
tons
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and
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EU
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the EU
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is heavier than BRAZIL
6.420
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at 6.420
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metric
tons
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. We can see that in
two
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the two
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group
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groups
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cheese
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and
milk
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,
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EU
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the EU
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is the most
weight
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and there are outstanding statistics. In
group
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butter,
India
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is the most
weight
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in the
group
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.
India
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is heavier than
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EU
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the EU
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and
UNITED
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the UNITED
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STATES
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5.460 and 6.690 metric
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and
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EU
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the EU
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is more
weight
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than
UNITED
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the UNITED
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STATES
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1.230
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by 1.230
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metric
tons
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. We can see that in
this
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group
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,
India
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produces butter more than
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EU
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the EU
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and UNITED
STATES
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. In
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group
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the group
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Milk
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of Milk
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power,
China
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is
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has
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the most
weight
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in
this
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group
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.
China
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is heavier
NEW
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ZEALEND
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ZEALAND
and
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90 and 430 metric
tons
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, NEW
ZEALEND
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ZEALAND
is more
weight
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than
EU
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340 metric
tons
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. We can see in
this
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group
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CHINA
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produces
Milk
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power more than others but the quantity is not too high.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words eu, group, milk, cheese, india, china, tons, weight, states with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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