The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
bar chart
show
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shows
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us
about
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apply
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the percentage of
people
those
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apply
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who were born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
who
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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living
3
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in 3
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differents
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different
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area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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which are urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
Base
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Based
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on the bar chart in 1995,
between
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apply
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people
born in
Australia
and
people
born outside
Australia
are slightly different.
People
who
born
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are born
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outside
Australia
living
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and living
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in cities and rural areas
are dramatically increase
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are dramatically increasing
are dramatically increased
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than those who
born
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are born
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in
Australia
.
Furthermore
,
people
born in
Austlia
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Australia
living in
Towns
is
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are
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steadily higher than
people
born outside
Australia
.
Moreover
, if we
are looking
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look
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to
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at
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the bar chart in 2010,
people
born in
Australia
living in
towns
and rural
ares
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areas
are stable and those who
born
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were born
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outside
Australia
living in rural
ares
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areas
dramatically
drop and
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dropped
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lower than
people
living in
towns
.
Last
but not least, between 1995 and 2010.
People
in 2010 are living in cities steadily
rising
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rose
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and those who
living
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live
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in
towns
and rural
ares
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areas
are
Verb problem
apply
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dramatically
drop
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dropped
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compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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to 1995.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, towns with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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