The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
Nowadays, a wide range of individuals are purchasing gold as accessories or investments for the future. The presented graph demonstrates an erratic pattern in the alterations in the rate of
sales
of gold in one year.
Overall
, there is a fluctuation between months,
however
, March is the highest year people spend money on it. In January, the money stood at 200
million
dirhams. It minimally increased to 225 after one month. The
sales
dramatically increased to 350
million
dirhams in March.
Nonetheless
, the
sales
plunged suddenly and plummeted to 120
million
dirhams in July. From July to September, the market shows a fluctuation in
sales
.
Nevertheless
, the market started to rebound and the
sales
slightly increased to 175
million
. For the rest three months the
sales
remained stable.
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