The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
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Nowadays, a wide range of individuals are purchasing gold as accessories or investments for the future. The presented graph demonstrates an erratic pattern in the alterations in the rate of
sales
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of gold in one year.
Overall
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, there is a fluctuation between months,
however
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, March is the highest year people spend money on it. In January, the money stood at 200
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dirhams. It minimally increased to 225 after one month. The
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dramatically increased to 350
million
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dirhams in March.
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, the
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plunged suddenly and plummeted to 120
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dirhams in July. From July to September, the market shows a fluctuation in
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.
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, the market started to rebound and the
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slightly increased to 175
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. For the rest three months the
sales
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remained stable.
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