The graphs below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graphs below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Nowadays, we can see a lot of trends are raised and sparked,
however
, others are declined and eliminated.
Therefore
, there was not any stability in the market for a long period. The presented graph demonstrates the figures for opened and closed
shops
in the period from 2011 to 2018 in one country.
Overall
, there is an erratic pattern. There was a fluctuation between both graphs. In 2011, the number of opened
shops
was at the top of shelves. After one year, it plunged suddenly to 4000
shops
. From 2012 to 2014, there was a rapid increase in the
stores
and became 6000
stores
. The figures plummeted to 4000 again in 2015. For 2 years, the number of opened
stores
remained stable
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and slightly decreased in 2018 to 3000
shops
.
However
, the closed
shops
stood at 6500 in 2011. The numbers fluctuated for 4 years.
Nevertheless
, it roughly decreased to less than 500
stores
in 2015. The numbers skyrocketed and increased 10 times to 5000
stores
in 2016. Ultimately, the number of closed
stores
remained stable from 2016 to 2018.
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