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The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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This
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 table chart depicts the status of the rent prices and annual wages in three communities of London (Notting Hill, Regent's Park, and Fulham). At first sight, we can see that
Notting
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the Notting
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 Hill
area
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 is the most expensive
neigborhood
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neighbourhood
 with the highest economic status of the population.
Firstly
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, for the
1
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1-bedroom
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bedroom
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apartments
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 in
the
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Notting Hill people have to pay 375
pounds
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, and their average annual salary is 98.500
pounds
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. And the price of the 3
bedroom
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 flat is 738
pounds
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 monthly (twice as much as 1
bedroom
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), and they have
an annual wages
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annual wages
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 like two hold than 1
bedroom
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tennants
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tenants
in
this
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area
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.
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, The Regent's Park
apartments
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. The price of the 1
bedroom
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 apartment is 325
pounds
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,
exectly
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exactly
 twice smaller than the
pric e
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price
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 of the 3
bedroom
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 flat (650
pounds
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). And about the annual salary I can say that there is almost the same ratio - 85.500
pounds
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 for the 1
bedroom
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 tenants and 170.500
pound
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pounds
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 for the 3
bedroom
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 indwellers.
The
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Last
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last
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, but not least,
the
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Fullham
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Fulham
area
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,
wich
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which
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 has a different ratio - 1:3. So we can see from the table that the price is 215
pounds
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 and 600
pounds
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 for the 1
bedroom
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apartments
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 and for 3
bedroom
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apartments
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 respectively. Nearly the same ratio we can see in the annual wages - 56.500
pounds
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 and 157.500
pounds
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 respectively.
Summarasing
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Summarising
 up all the data, we can say that in the poorest
area
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 of London, Fulham, the
coefficien
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coefficient
coefficients
 of the prices of a dwelling and annual salary is different for
unknown
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an unknown
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reason
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reasons
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,
than
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then
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 in
two
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the two
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 other areas.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, bedroom, apartments, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rental charges
  • salaries
  • disparities
  • trends
  • analyze
  • unique features
  • stands out
  • implications
  • compares
  • observed
  • specific
  • figures
  • summarize
  • main findings
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