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The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
expenditure
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 on
coffee
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 and tea habits in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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 during the past 4 weeks given the percentage of city residents.
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, going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea had the highest
expenditure
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 across all cities compared to purchasing fresh
coffee
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. A notable
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trend is that
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, and
Hobart
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 all had comparable data, with slight differences,
while
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 the least amount was spent on buying fresh
coffee
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 across all 5 cities in Australia. In
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of people going to a cafe for tea or
coffee
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 accounted for the highest
expenditure
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, with well beyond 60%.
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 was followed by the
Sydney
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, which was approximately at 60%.
Brisbane
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 was the next highest, with roughly 55%. The least amount spent was in
Adelaide
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, accounting for just under 50%.
People
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spendings
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spending
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 on instant
coffee
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 was the second highest among the 3 categories.
Hobart
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 and
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brisbane
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Brisbane
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 were slightly below 55%, accounting for the highest
expenditure
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.
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 was followed
with
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Adelaide
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 and
Melbourne
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, with expenditures marginally below 50%. The least
expenditure
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 was in
Sydney
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, accounting for just over 45%. The category with the minimal
expenditure
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 was buying fresh
coffee
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.
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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 contributed to just beyond 40%. The second highest
expenditure
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 accounted for marginally over 35% in
Hobart
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.
Adelaide
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 and
Brisbane
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 accounted for the smallest share in all
catgeories
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categories
 across all cities, with well over 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, coffee, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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