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school uniforms should be mandatory in all schools agree or disagree

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Nowadays,
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students
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students'
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 attire is perpetual .I agree with
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view point
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viewpoint
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 because
school
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 uniform maintains unity and discipline among
students
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. The common
dress
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which
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provided by the
school
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 states that
every of
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everyone
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 is equal. Many young individuals often tend to show off their lifestyle.
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,
this
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 type of behaviour can cause lots of
problem
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 between
students
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.
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the sudents
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sudents
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students
 are amiable with each other, there are chances that
this
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dress
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 could create discrimination between them. I
also
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 believe that
this
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 is the right time for
students
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 to learn about formal
way
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ways
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 of dressing.
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numerable
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 college
students
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 feel
school
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 life
was
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 way better with respect, to dressing sense.
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, dressing is the predominant factor that states an individual's character. As many
students
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 tend to be more focused on fashion, they often lose concentration on
studies
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their studies
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. At
this
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 age, young individuals use social relentlessly and learn
lot
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 of
umwanted
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unwanted
 habits which affect their studies. Mostly, they try to be more fashionable if there is no
school
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 uniform.
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, there will be
time
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times
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 when people can wear outfits as per their wish but only after completing
school
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 an individual get the needed maturity.
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,
school
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dress
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 projects a
sudent
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student
 in
a
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apply
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formal attire which brings
an
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 productive mindset to a person.
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,
Los
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lots
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 of people tend to
dress
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 up formally because of their way of dressing during schooling.
To conclude
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, I agree that
school
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 uniform is pivotal as it brings unity and matured 
well being
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well-being
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 for a student.

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task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy. There are several minor errors, such as 'sudent' instead of 'student', 'perpetual' instead of 'perpetually', etc. Revising for these errors can significantly improve clarity and comprehension.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words and transitional phrases to create smoother connections between your arguments. This will help in maintaining a seamless flow in the essay.
task achievement
Expand on your points with more specific examples or elaboration. This will help in fully developing your argument and making it more persuasive.
task achievement
Good use of relevant examples to support your main points, such as claiming that college students feel school life was better with respect to dressing sense.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-defined, helping in clearly stating and summarizing your opinion.
task achievement
The essay stays focused on the topic and addresses the main question effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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