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Nowadays people live longer after they retire. How does this affect indivuals and society? what cana be done about this?

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In recent times, there has been increased longevity in people after
retirement
, which has drawbacks on the society's economy and the
families
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family's
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 finances.
This
 can be controlled by increasing the
retirement
age
 of the population.
To begin
 with, people nowadays live for many
years
 after
retirement
 and require a nation’s financé
as well as
 their families' resources to
substain
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sustain
 them in
later
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 stage. To buttress
this
, the pension received is not enough for the sustainability of the older population for the unprecedented number of
years
 they live now, and have to depend on the government to fund their care.
Also
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 their relatives more often than not invest both their time and money for their care.
For instance
, in the past 5
years
 UK has reportedly spent millions of pounds
to
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 the running of care homes, resulting in
possible
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 shift of funds from other sectors.
Furthermore
, it is imperative to proffer viable solutions to the problem of increased longevity and the most effective way would be to increase the
retirement
age
 of the people.
This
 will enable them to work more and accrue more pensions.
For example
 in 2003, Nigeria adjusted the
retirement
age
 of her
popluation
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population
 from 55
years
 to 68
years
hence
 the older
age
 group
have
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 more time to work, more
pension
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pensions
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 to receive and
save
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 up for later days. In conclusion, the recent inclination
in
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 longevity is affecting most countries'
economy
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economies
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 and can be put under control by increasing the populations' working
age
 thereby decreasing the period after
retirement
as well as
 acquiring more funds from
Pension
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Pensions
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.
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