The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.

The line graph shows the amount of money the UK foreign visitors spent over a 30-year period

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measured in millions

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sterling and the pie charts show the percentage of reasons for visits divided into four categories holiday,business,visiting friends and relatives and other between two years.

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, the line graph shows an increase in the amount spent between 1980 and 2010.

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, we can clearly see in the pie chart that the proportions of spending have mildly changed. In the line graph

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the amount spent in 1980 was

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over 7,500 million pounds sterling.

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it kept fluctuating over the years it increased gradually reaching its highest point in 1996 at 12,000 million pound sterling and by 2010 it had a mild drop to 10,500 million pound sterling.

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the pie chart shows in 1980 the majority of

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was for holiday at 44.1% and business at 20 .7%, Visiting friends and relatives and other accounts for only the third of courses to

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at 18.7% and 16.6% respectively,

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slightly changed in 2010

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holiday is still the number one reason to

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percentage has decreased by about 5%

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other causes to

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. other categories

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increased.