Many people today, especially in the developed world, are choosing to have fewer children, or none at all. Why is this happening, and do you think it is a good trend? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Task Response

While the essay addresses the topic and provides a rationale, it needs clearer organization. Try to outline your essay before writing to ensure a logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and include supporting details that are well-explained.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Some sentences are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'this leads to extinction of mankind to in the future' should be 'this could lead to the extinction of mankind in the future.'

Coherence and Cohesion

Use more varied and appropriate vocabulary words to express your ideas clearly. Consistent and clear use of linking words and phrases such as 'however,' 'furthermore,' and 'for instance' would improve readability.

Task Achievement

The essay attempts to address both parts of the task by identifying causes and evaluating the trend.

Task Achievement

Efforts have been made to include relevant examples from experience or general knowledge, such as the UK survey.

Coherence and Cohesion

There's a clear attempt to have an introduction and conclusion, which frames the essay well.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

336 words

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