Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them.Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them.discuss both views and give your opinion.
These days, many people like to receive plenty of
gifts
from others
wheather
known person or unknown. person to around the world. Some people think that Correct your spelling
whether
people
Change noun form
people's
gifts
are considered as more curcial
Correct your spelling
crucial
of
showing their Change preposition
to
affection
and love
to others
while
others
say that there are several best methods to show
our care
and love
to them. This
essay discusses both viewpoints for the following reasons.
On the one hand, presents and gifts
are considered as care
, when persons receive any gifts
from anyone, he
Correct pronoun usage
they
thinks
they have more Correct subject-verb agreement
think
care
and love
to
me, that's why They give it to me. Change preposition
for
This
expose
and Change the verb form
exposes
express
our Correct subject-verb agreement
expresses
affection
to others
by giving any gifts
. For example
, new
married couples usually receive a lot of presents from their Change the word
newly
friends
and family members
because of
they bless and Change preposition
apply
care
by giving gifts
to couples. To be more precise, the population not
receive from all, they only get from their close buddies who Change the verb form
does not
did not
care
. Hence
, gifts
lead to show
care
and affection
.
Conversely
, giving presents to others
is not only
way to express our Add an article
the only
care
to others
,
there are other ways Add the word(s)
, but
also
give
better Fix the infinitive
to give
refult
, Correct your spelling
result
results
such
as spending a
quality Remove the article
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
time
with their loved one
and Correct pronoun usage
ones
talk
freely with their family Wrong verb form
talking
members
, that leads to show
Wrong verb form
showing
care
to others
. In this
modern era, individuals her
have neither spare Correct your spelling
here
time
nor interest to
spending Change preposition
in
time
with families. For instance
, mankind who be
underprivileged always be happy because they do not provide any Wrong verb form
are
gifts
to their family members
and friends
, but they always be with them in good and bad situations. Henceforth, spending time
with their family members
is the best way to show
care
to others
. than giving gifts
.
In conclusion, although
giving presents to others
enhance
. they have more Correct subject-verb agreement
enhances
care
towards receiving
person because it expresses their Correct article usage
the receiving
love
and affection
, spending a quality of time
with their family members
and friends
can show
more care
towards others
. However
, in my opinion, about this
Correct determiner usage
apply
spending
Add a comma
spending,
a
quality Remove the article
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
time
with their family members
and friends
are
the best method to express our case to Correct subject-verb agreement
is
others
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Your essay successfully discusses both viewpoints, which is essential for addressing the task.
task achievement
You provide clear reasons why both giving gifts and spending quality time can show care and affection.
Your opinion
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