Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them.Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them.discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days, many people like to receive plenty of
gifts
from
others
wheather
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whether
known person or unknown. person to around the world. Some people think that
people
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people's
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gifts
are considered as more
curcial
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crucial
of
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to
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showing their
affection
and
love
to
others
while
others
say that there are several best methods to
show
our
care
and
love
to them.
This
essay discusses both viewpoints for the following reasons. On the one hand, presents and
gifts
are considered as
care
, when persons receive any
gifts
from anyone,
he
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they
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thinks
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think
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they have more
care
and
love
to
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for
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me, that's why They give it to me.
This
expose
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exposes
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and
express
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expresses
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our
affection
to
others
by giving any
gifts
.
For example
,
new
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newly
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married couples usually receive a lot of presents from their
friends
and family
members
because
of
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apply
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they bless and
care
by giving
gifts
to couples. To be more precise, the population
not
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does not
did not
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receive from all, they only get from their close buddies who
care
.
Hence
,
gifts
lead to
show
care
and
affection
.
Conversely
, giving presents to
others
is not
only
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the only
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way to express our
care
to
others
,
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, but
show examples
there are other ways
also
give
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to give
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better
refult
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result
results
,
such
as spending
a
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apply
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quality
of
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apply
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time
with their loved
one
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ones
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and
talk
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talking
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freely with their family
members
, that leads to
show
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showing
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care
to
others
. In
this
modern era, individuals
her
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here
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have neither spare
time
nor interest
to
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in
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spending
time
with families.
For instance
, mankind who
be
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are
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underprivileged always be happy because they do not provide any
gifts
to their family
members
and
friends
, but they always be with them in good and bad situations. Henceforth, spending
time
with their family
members
is the best way to
show
care
to
others
. than giving
gifts
. In conclusion,
although
giving presents to
others
enhance
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enhances
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. they have more
care
towards
receiving
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the receiving
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person because it expresses their
love
and
affection
, spending a quality of
time
with their family
members
and
friends
can
show
more
care
towards
others
.
However
, in my opinion, about
this
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apply
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spending
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spending,
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a
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apply
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quality
of
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apply
show examples
time
with their family
members
and
friends
are
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is
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the best method to express our case to
others
.
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Your essay successfully discusses both viewpoints, which is essential for addressing the task.
task achievement
You provide clear reasons why both giving gifts and spending quality time can show care and affection.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible symbols
  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
  • Communication
  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
  • Physical presence
  • Material possessions
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