The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of different purposes that
people
in Great Britain had for visiting
museums
in 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, learning and gaining knowledge remained to be the major reasons for the ten years
while
people
were less likely to visit
museums
to purchase art. A larger percentage of
people
attended a special exhibit, spent time with family and friends and
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arts
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whereas
less
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travellers visited
museums
to fill their schedules in 2000. Starting with the aims with rising percentages, there was only
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% increase in the rate of
people
who visited
museums
for educational purposes in 2000 from 44% in 1990, making it the most dominant reason. There were
also
some increases in the proportion of attending a special event
as well as
spending time with friends and family with the former rising from 12%
fo
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18% and the latter from 12% to 17% respectively, which made the latter slightly more popular.
Furthermore
, other reasons experienced a more dramatic rise, jumping from 1% to 5% for a decade. Turning to the rest of the graph which indicated some declines, much
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travellers visited
museums
just to fill their schedules with 12% in 1990 than 27% in 2000, when it shared the second largest
percenrage
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percentage
.
In addition
, there was a minor decrease
of
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the proportion of those who went to
museums
for other reasons from 4% to 3% respectively.
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