The following charts show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in two years. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010

The following charts show the percentage of

electricity production by fuel source in France in two years. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of electricity production by fuel

source in France in 1990 and 2010
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The circle diagrams provide us
data
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on the main sources of electricity in the Republic of France over
30-year
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a 30-year
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period. The difference over the years
presented
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in percentages.
Overall
, it is clear from the data that in 2010 nuclear power
takes
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the biggest pie of 67% regardless that in 1980 it was merely a fifth. That shows us sharp improvement which is tightly connected to
overall
technical advancements that were made during that time. Meanwhile, hydroelectric energy showed itself as something inefficient dropping from
mere
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6% in 1980 to a very small portion of 2% in 2010.
Besides
that, the charts illustrate other power sources
such
as coal, oil and natural gas. In 1980 both gas and carbon were almost
the
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third of the chart at 28% with oil being at 22%.
However
, in 2010 those indicators showed
dramatic
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a dramatic
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fall where natural gas declined up to 4% and
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reduced to 13%. To summarize,
pie
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the pie
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charts
presented
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present
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the significant changes in
France
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energetic
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field with nuclear power taking the leading role over the years,
whereas
other units showed only
decline
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a decline
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • electricity production
  • fuel source
  • nuclear power
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • coal
  • natural gas
  • oil
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • biomass
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant change
  • trend
  • distribution
  • energy mix
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