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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside thes vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays the advancement of
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technology has covered all parts of the globe namely the internet, artificial intelligence and others.
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,
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driverless vehicles including cars and
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public
transports
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. I totally believe that the advantages of
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 trend will benefit us all, despite all the drawbacks which I will explain in the following paragraph.
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 to
this
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 autonomous car . First of
all
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 is that the significant changes in reducing traffic congestion because of the
vitual
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virtual
visual
vital
 intelligence can connect with others to smooth and optimize better routes compared to mankind.
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the
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 of the passengers can be secured .
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human
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 error
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 as fatigue, drunk
driver
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 and distraction can lead to
motality
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mortality
motility
 but with the new improvements, the number of accidents
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 the road will be decreased.
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those who are disabled individuals or elderly can travel easily from one place to another place without driving by themselves.
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, these upsides not only bring satisfaction to the people but
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 security. On the negative
sides
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, there
is
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 always some malfunctions in cybersecurity or technology failures that might cause harm to the passengers.
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, car hacking
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could compromise the well-being of the passengers.
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, jobs
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 as drivers will
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while
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 trying to adapt to the changes of the new technologies causing many unemployed
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 and only sources of income
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centain
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certain
 families. In conclusion, consider every
downsides
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 always
have
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 a silver lining .As we can see,
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 helps us to boost our quality of life.
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, I believe that the benefits are more considerable rather than the demerits.

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task achievement
While you presented both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, aim for more detailed development of your points. Providing more specific examples and data can support your argument more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on tightening the logical structure of your essay. Some points, while valid, could benefit from clearer transitions and connections to the main argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which reinforces your main argument and wraps up the discussion effectively.
task achievement
You provided a balanced view by addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. This demonstrates a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • optimize routes
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • elderly
  • disabled individuals
  • job losses
  • technology failures
  • cybersecurity
  • hacking
  • cyber attacks
  • passenger safety
  • widespread adoption
  • accidents
  • fatigue
  • distracted driving
  • vulnerable
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