Modern technology, such as personal computers and the Internet, have make it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office every day. What are some of the advantage and disadvantages of this situation?
Thanks to technological developments
larger
proportion of employees prefer to Correct article usage
a larger
work
at home instead
of going to
Change preposition
apply
an
daily. Change the article
a
This
essay will discuss about advantages and disadvantages of this
situation that have
been Correct subject-verb agreement
has
occuring
in our society.
An important benefit of working from home is Correct your spelling
occurring
lack
of need to travel to and from an office. Correct article usage
the lack
In other
words
online Add a comma
words,
work
does not require presence
of own vehicle or spending money on public Add an article
the presence
transports
, Fix the agreement mistake
transport
such
as bus
, Fix the agreement mistake
buses
taxi
or Fix the agreement mistake
taxis
train
is unnecessary. Fix the agreement mistake
trains
This
result
in less amount of wasted money Fix the agreement mistake
results
for
Change preposition
on
transportations
, which is a big advantage for young workers. Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
For instance
, employers of many companies in Japan offer online tasks for their workers who have
not their own transport for travelling, which is Add a missing verb
do have
positevely
Correct your spelling
positively
effected
Correct your spelling
affected
to
Change preposition
by
economy
of Add an article
the economy
country
.
Add an article
the country
a country
On the other hand
, there are a lot of disadvantages of online work
. The major drawback is the risk of obesity. People who spent
most of their time are more likely to gain weight Wrong verb form
spend
due to
the absence of active
lifestyle. Correct article usage
an active
This
result
in various health diseases, Fix the agreement mistake
results
such
as diabetes, problems
with Correct word choice
and problems
kidneys
or heart. Correct article usage
the kidneys
For example
, according to
experts, recumbent
lifestyle caused diabetes of Correct article usage
a recumbent
second
type in 56% of total cases in recent years.
Change the article
the second
To conclude
, people from various nations have been
started to Unnecessary verb
apply
work
from home instead
of offline work
. This
situation can has
both positive and negative Change the verb form
have
impact
on Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
the
society, where benefits Correct article usage
apply
associated
Add a missing verb
are associated
by
less waste of finance and drawbacks Change preposition
with
relates
to health problems caused by Correct subject-verb agreement
relate
lazy
lifestyle.Correct article usage
a lazy
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