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The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graphs illustrate
purpose
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the purpose
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 of
Britian
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British
 citizens for visiting museums of art in two
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years
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 (1990 and 2000).
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of
people
 going to museums because of several given reasons increased over time, with the notable exception of the reason associated
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 filling their travel schedules. In 1990, nearly half of total
visiters
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visitors
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 had
intention
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the intention
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 to learn and gain knowledge, and
this
 situation did not change over the period, making up 45% of
people
 after 10 years.
This
 trend was followed by
british
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British
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people
 who went to these facilities to spend time
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with the
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the
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their
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 loved ones and to attend a special exhibit, seeing
a
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apply
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significant growth of 5
percent
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per cent
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 and 6
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000, respectively.
On the other hand
, the percentage proportion of
Britian
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British
 habitans who travelled to museums fill their free time on holiday dramatically dropped by 15%.
In contrast
, the number of
people
 visiting these places with a desire to buy art has seen an upward trend from 1% to 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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