The best way that a government can reduce the traffic congestion in cities is to provide public transport free of cost to people 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that

transport

this

crucial in modern society.

While

is commonly held belief that private car is cost expensive than

transport

consequently

it is cost higher . In the essay, I will discuss some solutions to

this

issue and shed light on the advantages and disadvantages if the government made free

transport

every day. to bring with one hand, some people say if was

transport

free

this

negative

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, however,

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however

this

helps them to keep their money but they do not like it due for several reasons;

First,

nowadays

this

transport

is not free in most countries

nevertheless

is very congested.

Secondly

, the visitors will use the trains and buses for free is not good for

economy

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the economy

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Additionally

, the

transport

will be a lot of homeless

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if it

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was

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free .

On the other hand

, some people say if the government made free

transport

this

encourage them to use it .consequntly

this

help them to make the road more comfortable

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For

for instance

during the World Cup 2022 in Qatar the government made the underground free

this

was useful. Inclusion I consider that

this

free cost includes cons and pros

hence

I disagree with it .In other

words

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words,

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there are other solutions

for example

the development of the street and the extension of

transport

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

216 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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Some people believe that the fittest and strongest individuals and teams always succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes. Discuss both views and give your opinions.