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The best way that a government can reduce the traffic congestion in cities is to provide public transport free of cost to people 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that
transport
this
 crucial in modern society.
While
 is commonly held belief that private car is cost expensive than
transport
consequently
 it is cost higher . In the essay, I will discuss some solutions to
this
 issue and shed light on the advantages and disadvantages if the government made free
transport
 every day. to bring with one hand, some people say if was
transport
 free
this
 negative
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, however,
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however
this
 helps them to keep their money but they do not like it due for several reasons;
First,
nowadays
this
transport
 is not free in most countries
nevertheless
 is very congested.
Secondly
, the visitors will use the trains and buses for free is not good for
economy
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the economy
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.
Additionally
, the
transport
 will be a lot of homeless
it
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if it
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was
Wrong verb form
is
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 free .
On the other hand
, some people say if the government made free
transport
this
 encourage them to use it .consequntly
this
 help them to make the road more comfortable
.
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For
for instance
 during the World Cup 2022 in Qatar the government made the underground free
this
 was useful. Inclusion I consider that
this
 free cost includes cons and pros
hence
 I disagree with it .In other
words
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 there are other solutions
for example
 the development of the street and the extension of
transport
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The essay demonstrates a clear attempt to address both sides of the issue, which indicates a balanced perspective.
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The provision of a real-life example, the World Cup 2022 in Qatar, strengthens the argument and makes it more relatable.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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