The line graph shows the changes in the populations of six different areas of the world between 1960 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the populations of six different areas of the world between 1960 and 2010.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line compares the six different areas of the world about the
change
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of the populations from 1960 until 2010, and
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the urban and population trends and trends in age structure. In
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summary, the people have the same
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in the
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of age structure between 1970-2040 on the under 15, and over 65 categories.
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, the total
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between 1960-2040 is the highest compared with the other categories. Based on the line graph, the
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in age is the highest around the 15-60 years old with 35 when the under 15 and over
65 year old
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65-year-old
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have lower
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just 5. In the
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, people
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under 65 years old is the lowest
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1960 around 3 of
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.
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, if we compare
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the rural and urban
population
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populations
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,
urban
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the urban
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trend
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has the lowest
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and fluctuation because of under 10
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while
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rural has the middle in the
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around 38.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, trend with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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