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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task
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The bar graph illustrates spending
of
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on
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 consumer goods in
France
 and
UK
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the UK
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 in 2010.
Overall
, both countries have spent the highest amount on cars. The lowest expenditure in
France
 which is on cameras
are
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is
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 almost equal to the United
Kingdoms
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Kingdom's
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spendings
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spending
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 on Perfume.
Eventhough
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Even though
 both
contries
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countries
 spent more on cars,
UK
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the UK
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 spent the most which
is
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was
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 450,000 and
France
 spent 50,000 lesser for the same to be equal
with
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to
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 United
Kingdoms
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Kingdoms'
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 second highest expenditure, which
is
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was
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 on books. For computers, perfume and books
France
 spent just above 350 thousand, 200 thousand and 300 thousand respectively.
However
, the least amount of 150,000 is spent on cameras in
France
 and it is almost equal to the expenditure
of
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on
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 perfume in
UK
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the UK
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 which is just below 150,000.
UK
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The UK
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 spent 350,000 on computers and slightly
lesser
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less
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 than the amount spent
for
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on
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 cameras which
was
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were
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 just above 350,000.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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