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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should •

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should •
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The bar chart shows the number of people in the USA who have
heart
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attacks
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, categorized by
age
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 range and gender.
Overall
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, the bar chart indicates that
heart
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attacks
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 are more common in older
age
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 groups in the USA. The highest incidence of
heart
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attacks
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 is among people older than 65 years. In every
age
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group
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,
women
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 experience fewer
heart
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attacks
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 than
men
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. The younger generation, between 29 to 44 years old, has the fewest
heart
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attacks
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, with 123,000
men
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 and only 3,000
women
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 affected. The middle
age
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group
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, from 45 to 64, experiences a significant increase, with 424,000
men
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 and 136,000
women
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 affected. In the elderly
group
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, those older than 65,
men
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 see a slight increase, accounting for 440,000
heart
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attacks
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.
Women
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 in
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age
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group
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 see a dramatic surge to 374,000
heart
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attacks
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words heart, attacks, age, group, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • occurrence
  • prevalence
  • age group
  • gender disparities
  • notable trends
  • significant
  • comparison
  • discrepancies
  • patterns
  • statistics
  • demographics
  • rate of incidence
  • proportion
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