Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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There are those who believe that economic progress and
sustentability
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sustainability
can work together. others argued that it is
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not possible to do so. I believe, that economic growth and
eco friendly
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practices
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must be together all the time. It is argued that
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a
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country
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economy
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will progress just if the efforts
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on
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more income. The environment must be a lower priority if the
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wants to increase. The economic progress of a
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may
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on a variety of industries.
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, the extraction and use of natural resources,
as well as
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, industries like
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and technology.
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this
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country
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country
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an
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developing countries will cope with more problems because most of their
economy
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relies on natural resources. so the negative impact on nature will be higher.
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, there are people who believe that
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despite
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the
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eco friendly
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mesuares
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measures
must be
implaced
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placed
all the time.
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Economy
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and nature have to work
togheter
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together
.
Sustentability
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Sustainability
awarness
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awareness
it
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is required for a better future. These days,
technology
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advances
had
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proven the necessity of environmentally friendly
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in all sectors, if we hope that the human
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survive
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climate change.
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i
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believe that we must
incorporated
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greener
practices
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to
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economy
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. Taking care of fauna and flora it is a must.
Goverrnments
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Governments
Government
and society need to be aware of climate change and how
this
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really
impact
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in
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our health and wellbeing.
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why,
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economy
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and
environment
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the environment
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need to work together
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that
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economy
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the economy
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will
be growth
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under
a good environmental
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a good environmental practice
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practices
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task response
Your introduction should clearly outline both perspectives before presenting your own opinion. Consider rephrasing to make it clearer and more engaging.
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Make sure to define key terms clearly. For instance, explain briefly what 'economic progress' and 'environmentally friendly' mean.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors and strive for varied sentence structure. For example, instead of 'Goverrnments and society need to be aware of climate change and how this have really impact in our health and wellbeing,' you could write 'Governments and society need to be aware of climate change and its real impact on our health and well-being.'
coherence cohesion
Introduce each argument cohesively and logically. Clarify transition between ideas using connectors like 'However,' 'Moreover,' and 'In addition.'
task response
You have a clear stance on the issue and provide a logical reasoning to support it.
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The concluding paragraph effectively summarizes your opinion and reinforces your point of view.
coherence cohesion
You have touched on both perspectives and provided your opinion, which shows a clear understanding of the question.
coherence cohesion
Your use of transitional phrases like 'On the other hand' helps in guiding the reader through different arguments.

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