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The map shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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he
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The
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 maps below display the infrastructure development of
a
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the
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 village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
. As we can see, in 1995, there was a
residental
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residential
 area located
in
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 the North-West side. In the North-East, there was a gigantic farmland and forest park.
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, at the coastline with
sea
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the sea
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, there were fish markets and fishing
port
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. Shops were placed in front of the fishing industry buildings. Alongside, there was a hotel and a cafe in the South-East. At the current time, a lot of things changed drastically. Now,
instead
 of a large forest area and
a
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farmland, there is a golf and tennis area. Housing was extended by building more houses. Shops were replaced with restaurants
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the whole fishing industry disappeared and new apartments were built. The only things that stayed the same
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 a cafe and a hotel.
However
, a hotel set up
new
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 car park for its clients.
Overall
, huge changes impacted
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the infrastructure of a village.
While
 the fishing industry vanished, people got more opportunities to do sports. More houses were built, which probably increased the population of the countryside
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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