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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people have different opinions about where
professionals
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work
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. Some of them are convinced that humans with a profession like doctor or engineer need to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they studied, others think that it does not matter in which
country
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 they
work
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.
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 the first opinion, professional workers are needed in the
country
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 where they studied because they have been taught some information
that is
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such
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 a
country
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.
For example
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, my brother is a doctor and he can not
work
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 in other
counties
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countries
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 except Russia because he has been taught
according to
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 the Russian system. It can be dangerous for his clients because
abroad
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 system is unfamiliar to him, he can make mistakes and destroy lives.
According to
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 the second opinion,
professionals
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 are needed around the world because they are the best
in
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 their job.
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, my father is an engineer. He can
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 wherever he likes
,
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 because he knows his profession well and can handle it in different countries.
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, now he works in Russia, Serbia and Cyprus at the same time and does his best to help them develop.
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,
professionals
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 can help other countries with their knowledge
while
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 working.
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, my sister is a designer. She works in different places, sharing her experience in
this
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 sphere. In
the
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conclusion, people are confused
where
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about where
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professionals
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 need to
work
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. In my opinion,
professionals
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 are people
that
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who
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 know their job well and can
work
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 wherever they like. They need to share their knowledge and studies in other countries to cause the world
developing
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to develop
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.

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task achievement
While the essay addresses both perspectives, more detailed explanations and examples for each view would enhance the depth of the response. For instance, you could mention international medical practices and training differences for doctors, or discuss engineering standards in various countries.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph transitions to make the essay flow more smoothly. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas clearly, contributing to better coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame the discussion well.
task achievement
You provided personal anecdotes, which can be very effective in making arguments more relatable and understandable.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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