The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The present pie charts compare data about the percentage of people’s total spending in a particular country in Europe that was spent on various items and services in both 1958 and 2008.

Overall

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, in the first year clothes bought were the main things

instead

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of Luxury goods;

however

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, in the second time people preferred to spend money on what house bought, but they did not like travelling a lot.

According to

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the 1958 graph, the best thing that society bought were costumes at 32%; the second one was housing which had 10% less than the first thing;

moreover

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, entertainment, travel or transportation, food, and Luxury goods respectively.

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,the 2

last

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categories were nearly the same number. The plot of 2008 demonstrates houses, the initial thing, was absolutely the same as clothes in 1958;

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secondly

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was the two

finally

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things in 1958, increased and had a 17%;

then

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entertainments, clothes, and travel or transportation had 2, 20, and 10 per cent reduced.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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