The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the information
of
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on
the
online shopping Correct article usage
apply
sales
in retail Use synonyms
sectors
in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Obviously, online Use synonyms
sales
for retail Use synonyms
sectors
in Canada had rapid growth Use synonyms
in
2005 to 2010. Change preposition
from
Percentage
of almost retail Correct article usage
The percentage
sectors
increased especially Electronic & Appliances, food & beverage and video game, Use synonyms
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however
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however,
sales
of some retail Use synonyms
sector
as Home furnishings had Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
a
obvious decline Change the article
an
in in
2005 to 2010.
What stands up in comparing Change preposition
from
sales
of online Use synonyms
sales
for retail Use synonyms
sectors
between Use synonyms
two
pie charts is that there were increases Correct article usage
the two
of
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in
sales
and percentages of three Use synonyms
sectors
in Use synonyms
chart
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the chart
a chart
such
asLinking Words
Electronic
& Appliances, food & beverage and video Fix the agreement mistake
Electronics
game
. Especially the part of food & beverage that had a significant increase to 32% in 2010 from 22% in 2005, so that was the best figure if comparing with three Fix the agreement mistake
games
sectors
left. Use synonyms
Linking Words
While the
percentage of Correct word choice
The
two
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the two
sectors
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as
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apply
Electronic
& Appliances and video Fix the agreement mistake
Electronics
game
had a Fix the agreement mistake
games
growth
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similar growth
similarly
at 5% in 2010.But the online Linking Words
sales
of some Use synonyms
sector
as home furnishings decreased considerably ,it was from 25% in 2005 to 10% in 2010.Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
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