The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the information
of
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the
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online shopping
sales
in retail
sectors
in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Obviously, online
sales
for retail
sectors
in Canada had rapid growth
in
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2005 to 2010.
Percentage
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The percentage
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of almost retail
sectors
increased especially Electronic & Appliances, food & beverage and video game,
however
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sales
of some retail
sector
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sectors
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as Home furnishings had
a
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obvious decline
in in
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from
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2005 to 2010. What stands up in comparing
sales
of online
sales
for retail
sectors
between
two
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the two
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pie charts is that there were increases
of
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in
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sales
and percentages of three
sectors
in
chart
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the chart
a chart
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such
as
Electronic
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Electronics
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& Appliances, food & beverage and video
game
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games
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. Especially the part of food & beverage that had a significant increase to 32% in 2010 from 22% in 2005, so that was the best figure if comparing with three
sectors
left.
While the
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percentage of
two
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the two
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sectors
as
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Electronic
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Electronics
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& Appliances and video
game
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games
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had a
growth
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similar growth
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similarly
at 5% in 2010.But the online
sales
of some
sector
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sectors
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as home furnishings decreased considerably ,it was from 25% in 2005 to 10% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, sectors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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