Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for  communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. comics books radio television film theatre

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Conducting communication via media is
critical
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issue nowadays.
However
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the best
ways
for conveying
informations
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information
pieces of information
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are
radio
,
television
, and
film
.
This
essay is going to examine
to
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the three
ways
in terms of
advantage
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. Up to now, many
film
producers mentioned people’s problems via films and
television
.
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Television
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television
and cinema can provide lots of information only if their type of content
are
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is
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documentary or historical.
Besides
ıf we watch them , we can easily understand some information ,
furthermore
during the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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outbreak in the year 2021, All around the
world
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world,
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several states continued their
students
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student's
students'
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educations through
television
.
For example
in my country which is Turkey , the government makes produce films for pupil’s education.
Although
the
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cinema and
film
have beneficial features , sometimes they can be so detrimental
such
as during the watching documentary , the
advertise
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advertisement
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can show suddenly
therefore
people are distracted by it. İn
addition
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addition,
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they have a harmful effect rather than their benefits.
On the other hand
, From my point of view, the
radio
is quite versatile . Even though ıt does not have
display
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a display
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trait and screen , the
radio
quite
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is quite
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far from distracting objects.
Such
as when I studied
foreign
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a foreign
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language ,
while
I was
listening
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listening to
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the
radio
at
nights
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night
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. Many people do not prefer the
radio
just because ıt consists of one option which is listening to something. Even
more
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more,
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The latest
radio
called podcast is significantly effective because we can reach all information via podcast without being
a
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districted
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distracted
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.
Also
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it supports the children’s visualizations
as well as
develops.
To conclude
three considerably effective
ways
for
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of
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communicating are
the
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apply
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film
producing
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production
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, watching
tv
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TV
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and the
radio
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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listening
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listening to
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the
radio
has more qualifications than the other
ways
.
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Cite more specific examples to back up your points. For instance, provide more details about the educational programs run through television in Turkey.
task achievement
Ensure that all three media (radio, television, film) are compared comprehensively with balanced arguments for each.
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The essay covers the required task by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of three media for communicating information.
coherence cohesion
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