The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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The diagram illustrates the consequence of an observation about folk’s caffeine drink purchasing and sipping routines in five towns in Australia. I will describe the differences in each province.               With regard to the trends above we can categorize them into two different ways.

Firstly

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, unprocessed and soluble

coffee

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together have low tends by none of them came above fifty-five

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percent

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In addition

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, brand new

coffee

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is the lowest, especially in Brisbane and Adelaide cities that rise not more than thirty-five

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percent

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Whereas

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the number of persons who prefer these kinds of drinks has grown not much

whereas

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, in Adelaide, it turns out that the dried

coffee

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extract is the most popular in the area.             

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, in terms of café hoppers, they are high in graphs.

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, there is all over forty-five

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percent

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while

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in Melbourne is the highest (nearly sixty-five

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) coming up with Hobart for just a bit lower (hardly tell the differences).            

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, there are clearly seen that going to the

coffee

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shop is the most common.

On the other hand

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, Unroasted

coffee

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the least habitual and way back behind others.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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