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it is important for people to take risks, both in their profressional lives and their personal lives. do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
Risks
 can potentially ruin
people
 whether it be in their daily lives or in their work area. But, taking
risks
 can give you better knowledge about yourself that you didn't know. I disagree that the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages because you won't know the outcome unless you have done it. By doing so,
others
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opinion
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opinions
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 about you might change, making you look more brave and
willing
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.
Additionally
,
this
 can
gain
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 us more experience that we never knew about. By trying out new things, it can increase the chances of us being promoted in our
job
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jobs
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 or getting a better job for our future. So, it is a way to change your
image
 in front of others. Taking a test
such
 as IELTS is a risk for me because it will allow me to get accepted in other countries easily
However
, there is still a possibility of the risk
ruining
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people
's
image
 about you at work or even your life. Since the outcome is unknown,
risks
 in our daily lives can lead to a
life threathening
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life-threatening
 situation that can end up
on
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 the hospital. In our careers
however
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, it may lead to us losing our jobs and possibly ruining our
image
, resulting in employers not hiring us in the future.
This
 illustrates why taking
risks
 is a fifty-fifty chance.
To conclude
, taking them may change your
image
to
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people
 and
gaining
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 the chances of getting hired.
On the other hand
, it may do the opposite and prevent
people
 from hiring them or losing their
job
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jobs
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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