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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the percentage of people who are illiterate in six regions by gender for the previous year. Units are given in percentages.
Overall
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,
females
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 across the six regions had the highest
illiteracy
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rates
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 compared to
males
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. Noticeably,
males
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 from Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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 had similar percentages. Despite
this
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, both
males
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 and
females
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 from developed countries had the lowest
rates
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for
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illiteracy
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. The
illiteracy
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rates
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rate
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 for
females
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 in Latin America
were
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 around 12%
while
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 for
males
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 it was 10%.
This
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 figure dramatically rose to 20% in
females
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 from East
Asia
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.
In addition
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, women from Arab states and South
Asia
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 had the highest
rates
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 for literacy which were about 50% and nearly 60% respectively.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 was significantly different from
males
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 in the same regions, the percentages of literacy were less than 40%. An interesting trend was detected in
males
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 from North Africa,
Arab
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the Arab
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 peninsula and South
Asia
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.
Males
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 from these countries had similar
rates
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for
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illiteracy
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. Their
rates
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 were less than one-third. Unsurprisingly, less than 5% of
males
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 and
females
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 from developed countries could not read.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, illiteracy, rates, males, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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