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he tаь/е and charts below give information оп the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in опе агеа of britain. the tаь/е shows where the топеу сате from and the charts show how it was distributed. summarise the information ьу se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant

he tаь/е and charts below give information оп the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in опе агеа of britain. the tаь/е shows where the топеу сате from and the charts show how it was distributed. summarise the information ьу se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant
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The chart compares the spending of household members per
week
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 in a specific nation in the years 1968 and 2018 the comparison is between (
food
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, housing,fuel and power…etc )
Overall
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,
food
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 took over most of the
income
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 in 1968 with 35% of weekly
income
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 ,and least spent on fuel
and
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power and personal
goods
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 in 2018 with roughly
4%of
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4% of
 weekly
income
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. In 2018 the dominant part of money spending
is
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was
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 on entertainment
with
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at
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 about 22.5% ,and
then
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 housing
with
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at
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 almost 19% ,
food
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with
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at
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 about 13% and transport
with
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at
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 about 14% of weekly
income
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 ,the least were on both personal
goods
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 and
tank
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tanked
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 up with approximately 4% per
week
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 preceded by clothing and household
goods
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 with 5% and around 8% weekly respectively . In 1968 ,all
of
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transport ,household
goods
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 and personal
goods
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 almost took the same spending amount with around 7%, leisure
is
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was
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 8% and both
of
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housing and clothing were the same with 10% per
week
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,
food
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 was the highest rate among them with 35% per
week
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, food, income, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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