The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart demonstrates the data about the output of Surveys including some questions asking postgraduates and
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undergraduates
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a vaster
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studying
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Overall
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of the
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choosing
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However
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and the availability of
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accommodation
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in the reputation of
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30%, and
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reason is related to the cheaper cost of registration counted
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is a personal accommodation with 20%. On
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hand,three
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categories
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accommodation
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accommodation
(9%), and other (7%)
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from the highest to lowest common
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, university with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent reasons
  • academic reputation
  • campus facilities
  • location
  • course offerings
  • financial considerations
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • undergraduates
  • postgraduates
  • influence
  • attract
  • appeal
  • significant
  • crucial
  • investigating
  • analyzing
  • comparison
  • impact
  • social aspects
  • determining
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