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Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore.
According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible.
Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities.
In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a balanced view, discussing both the importance of History and Science and Technology in today's world. However, there are a few areas for improvement:
1. **Organization**: Ensure that each paragraph centers around one main idea with clear topic sentences.
2. **Language Precision**: Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and the use of linking words to improve the flow.
3. **Clarity and Detail**: Add more specific examples and elaborate on points to provide a thorough analysis.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion:
1. **Transition Words**: Use a wider range of linking phrases to connect ideas smoothly.
2. **Paragraph Development**: Each paragraph should develop a single point more completely, without jumping between ideas.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction and conclusion are present and clearly state your stance on the topic. This sets a good framework for your essay.
relevant specific examples
You have made a good attempt to provide relevant examples from both history and modern science and technology.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?