Many people say that globalization and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. Find the sample answer to this question
Environment
is the popular issues that Add an article
The environment
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the world
world
need to Correct your spelling
would
preparation
. Replace the word
prepare
However
, unwanted
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the unwanted
an unwanted
effect
from globalization and the Fix the agreement mistake
effects
grwing
number of multinational companies are Correct your spelling
growing
factor
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factors
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in how
how
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that
polluted
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pollute
environment
. I totally agree with Correct article usage
the environment
this
topic and this
essay will explain what is
the reasons Verb problem
apply
of
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for
negative
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the negative
effect
.
At Fix the agreement mistake
effects
first,
globalization is the
serious problem Correct article usage
a
such
as population, people can go anyways in the world as
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apply
traveling
or working but they always bring Change the spelling
travelling
the
waste Correct article usage
apply
product
with them. People throw it in several places Fix the agreement mistake
products
such
as mini shampoo, mini
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and mini
tootbrush
when they have finished or before they go back Correct your spelling
toothbrush
their
home. in Thailand, Correct pronoun usage
apply
travalers
came to Thailand about 10 Correct your spelling
travellers
milion
per year Correct your spelling
million
and
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apply
forgot
their things around 1 Wrong verb form
forget
milion
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million
ton
per year and that Fix the agreement mistake
tons
become
destroying Change the verb form
becomes
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the enviroment
enviroment
.
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environment
Secondly
, many companies have been establishing the
buildings in natural areas which Correct article usage
apply
is
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are
effecting
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affecting
to
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apply
animals
lives. Change noun form
animals'
animal's
Therefore
, water will be polluted and natural food will be
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apply
dissapeared
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disappeared
due to
the chemical waste product and the land where these animals live is limited.
Overall
, i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
golbalization
and companies worldwide impact the environment in bad ways. The risk Correct your spelling
globalization
globalisation
of
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to
planet
will Add an article
the planet
coming
if we are not responsible for Change the verb form
come
be coming
take
care Change the verb form
taking
our
place.Change preposition
of our
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