People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times. What is the cause? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?
In the past, residents lived their whole lives in the same city
while
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people
Use synonyms
tend
to migrate to different Wrong verb form
tended
cities
several times. I believe that relates to the revolution Use synonyms
on
transportation and career development and Change preposition
in
people
can benefit from these changes.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, the efficiency of transportation has been well developed in the present day. Advanced technology Linking Words
such
as aviation and mass transit provides Linking Words
a
opportunity for Change the article
an
people
to travel distance Use synonyms
cities
with high efficiency and capacity unlike in the past. Use synonyms
As a result
, migration to different Linking Words
cities
becomes affordable Use synonyms
of
the majority of citizens. It provides the benefit of Change preposition
for
people
having personal experience of different cultures. Use synonyms
People
can be Use synonyms
resident
of different Fix the agreement mistake
residents
cities
and interact with locals to find the most suitable lifestyle Use synonyms
to
them.
Change preposition
for
Furthermore
, in the past, Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
able
to have a simple education in local schools that was sufficient for them to find a job within the same city. The modern society, serval jobs Add a missing verb
were able
such
as lawyer and programmer require Linking Words
people
with intensive knowledge and skills to handle the job responsibility. Use synonyms
People
may Use synonyms
require
to move Wrong verb form
be required
into
different Change preposition
to
cities
which can provide Use synonyms
facility
that benefit Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
on
their career development. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, Oxford has several prestigious universities which provide the best education Linking Words
while
California has Linking Words
locate
the most advanced technology enterprise. Verb problem
apply
Peoples
can choose to live in different Fix the agreement mistake
People
cities
Use synonyms
base
on Wrong verb form
based
suitable
Replace the word
suitability
on
different stages of their career development.
To Change preposition
at
summarized
, Wrong verb form
summarise
people
migrate more frequently in the present day Use synonyms
due to
higher academic requirements of workers and the reduction in the cost of travel. It allows Linking Words
people
to find the most suitable lifestyle and jobs for them.Use synonyms
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