The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after 5 years.

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of anthropology after they completed their higher education degree

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one university. And the second chart displays their

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in three

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(freelance,

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and private companies) by 5 years'

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, the majority of anthropology

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full-time,

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the minority of them

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part-time and postgrad study. and the highest

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government

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more than others. Half of

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Anthropology

have full-time

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, and part-time a quarter of them, with a

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little

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in unemployment only 12%,

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bothnot

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both not

known and full-time post

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study had similar percentages at 8%.

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, the lowest percentage of anthropology at part-time

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and post

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graduate

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study at 5%. The highest

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were 100000 dollars and the

government

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sectors

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had a 50% of it , which is more than other

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40% in freelance consultants and

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only

30% in private companies.

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the lowest percentage of the

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on;y 25000-49999 dollars were 5% in two

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the

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and the freelance.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

163 words

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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after 5 years.

Some people prefer one on one lesson while others like group lessons. Discuss both views and give your opinion

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are requiered. Discuss both these views and your own opinion.