The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after 5 years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after 5 years.
The pie graph illustrates different
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of anthropology after they completed their higher education degree
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one university. And the second chart displays their
salaries
in three
sectors
(freelance,
government
and private companies) by 5 years'
work
.
Overall
, the majority of anthropology
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full-time,
while
the minority of them
work
part-time and postgrad study. and the highest
salaries
in
government
sectors
more than others. Half of
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Anthropology
have full-time
work
, and part-time a quarter of them, with a
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little
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in unemployment only 12%,
also
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both not
known and full-time post
gradyuted
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graduate
study had similar percentages at 8%.
However
, the lowest percentage of anthropology at part-time
work
and post
garduated
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graduate
graduated
study at 5%. The highest
salaries
were 100000 dollars and the
government
sectors
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had a 50% of it , which is more than other
sectors
40% in freelance consultants and
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only
30% in private companies.
While
the lowest percentage of the
salaries
on;y 25000-49999 dollars were 5% in two
sectors
the
government
and the freelance.
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