Topic: digital communication technology such as email, instant messaging and social media has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In
this
fast-growing
word
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world
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technology is a major asset which helped us in many ways. Communication technology helped us a in improving our communications and helped us to connect with people all over the world. I
am completely agree
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with
this
statement. In the later coming
paragraphs
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I will explain reasons to justify my opinion. In
this
rapidly evolving
word
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world
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technology is very important. It helps us to make connections with people far from us.
Such
as, with the help of these
inventions
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inventions,
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we can talk to our loved ones sitting in our homes even when they are living in different countries.
Secondly
, these advanced developments
also
helps
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us to learn new things through
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
For example
, we can search
any thing
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anything
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from our computer and find it on our screen. It saves
lot
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of energy and time to search those resources and information.
Last
but not
the
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least, these technologies
helped
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us to stay connected with the world and provide us
all
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the information about
the
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new
discovery
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occurring all over the world. It allows us to communicate with our work and learn new skills which will eventually boost us to earn more money. To summarize
it
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,
use
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the use
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of
technologies
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technology
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is increasing day by day as it becomes the basic necessity of our generation. It is
good
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a good
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movement to use
this
because it is helping us in many ways as described above. In the near
future
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future,
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many people will rely on these inventions to make
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earnings.
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task achievement
Improve grammar and sentence structure, and avoid repetitive phrases. For example, instead of saying 'in this fast-growing word technology is a major asset' and 'in this rapidly evolving word,' try to vary your vocabulary and phrasing.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. Mention real-life examples or statistics to make your essay more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs. For instance, using phrases like 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' and 'On the contrary' can enhance the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Summarize key points in the conclusion succinctly to reinforce your arguments. While your conclusion is good, making it slightly more concise can improve impact.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your opinion and provided several reasons to support it.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, fulfilling the necessary structure.
coherence cohesion
Main points are logically grouped into paragraphs, each with its focus.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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