The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of opened and closed Use synonyms
shops
in a particular country from 2011 to 2018. Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
during the period of eight years, the Linking Words
number
of shop closures majorly exceeds the Use synonyms
shop
openings, Correct quantifier usage
number of shop
while
both numbers tended to decrease throughout the period.
Linking Words
According to
the data, 2011 was the year when there were more Linking Words
shops
opened Use synonyms
at
around 8,500 Change preposition
apply
stores
Use synonyms
as
its peak. In the Change preposition
at
mean time
, the Correct your spelling
meantime
number
of closed Use synonyms
shops
Use synonyms
were
at approximately 6,500 Change the verb form
was
stores
. Three years later, the Use synonyms
number
of new Use synonyms
stores
declined significantly Use synonyms
at
around 6,000 Change preposition
to
stores
, after experiencing a sharp fall Use synonyms
at
4,000 Change preposition
of
stores
in 2012. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
stores
which were out-of-business remained relatively stable during the same period.
Use synonyms
Furthermore
, in 2015, the Linking Words
number
of those who started their business experienced a decrease Use synonyms
by
2,000, Change preposition
of
while
the Linking Words
number
of closed Use synonyms
shops
decreased dramatically to below 1,000 Use synonyms
stores
during the year. Use synonyms
However
, until 2017, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
shops
entering the market remained unchanged, but the Use synonyms
number
of closed Use synonyms
shops
managed to rise Use synonyms
up
to 5,000 Change preposition
apply
stores
at that time. In 2018, the Use synonyms
number
of new Use synonyms
stores
fell to its trough at 3,000 Use synonyms
stores
, Use synonyms
while
for the closed Linking Words
shops
, the numbers remained stable.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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