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The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the way how the biofuel production goes and the way
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ethanol is produced.
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, the 
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 begins when plants and trees grow
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the
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sunlight and 
carbon
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dioxide
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, which gives them energy and finishes when 
carbon
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dioxide
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 is released by vehicles
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 returned to the atmosphere. The 
process
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 includes three stages
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 as harvesting, pre-processing, and processing. These steps work continuously.
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 with, the cycle starts when trees receive sunlight and 
carbon
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dioxide
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 from 
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 to grow, after which they are harvested for the next processing.
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, these harvested plants transfer to the pre-processed
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, namely they are chopped into small pieces of wood. Following 
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, these pieces are turned into cellulose, which 
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 the chemical 
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on
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 the following step, during which sugars are extracted from them. After that, these sugars are mixed with microbes. The microbes consume sugars, leaving ethanol which is
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 used as a fuel for cars, trucks, and planes. When moving, these vehicles burn ethanol and release 
carbon
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dioxide
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to
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 the atmosphere, which is ready to be consumed by plants again. 
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, the 
process
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 starts over again and again.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, carbon, dioxide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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