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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the infrromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the infrromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 map illustrates the intermediary of
small
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a small
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town
 as it is now, and plans to
development
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 in the future
this
town
 called.
Overall
, the
islip
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Islip
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town
 transformed from a predominantly housing to an urban
center
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centre
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 with improved infrastructure,
residental
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residential
 and commercial options and car parks. In terms of now Islip
underdeveloped
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is underdeveloped
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,
charecterized
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characterized
characterised
 by a handful of houses in the middle.There
have
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main
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a main
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 road in the north and surrounded
with
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basically
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 shops
while
undeveloped
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an undeveloped
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 area in the southern part of the
town
 and in the
easthern
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eastern
copmrised
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comprised
comprises
 a large park. Respectively in future Islip developed very
beautifull
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beautiful
city
. The main road will change to pedestrians only and around the
city
 will build ways
while
 in the north and in the south corner will build new housing. In the intermediary
city
 will build
bus
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 station in the northern corner and in the end pedestrian road will
build
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car
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 park
while
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will
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significant densification . At the base
city
 variety of new houses will
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be constructured
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constructured
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constructed
 and
north
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the north
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 will
build
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introduction
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 of multiple shops, centrally located for accessibility.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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