Topic: The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent do you agreed or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

The environmental issues, nowadays, have become increasingly to serve, leading to widespread concerns. Many argue
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that the
effort
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of regular
people
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insufficient to address the issues. Others argue that only the
government
and large firms have the
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to be responsible
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the problems. I partially agree with
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viewpoint. I think that both individuals
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and larger organizations have a crucial role to
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in addressing the environmental problems. First and foremost, the
government
and larger entities have the power and resources to make a significant
change
. The
government
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to transform
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to be better by implementing the transportation systems in the country.
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, importing EV vehicles to run on city streets rather than using petrol cars.
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this
change
, carbon emissions have decreased in the air. The more we reduce carbon dioxide, the more we save the earth. On the other
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, large corporations have
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biggest to lead a huge
change
. They can transform their business models to be sustainable
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company
, which are protected the environment by reducing carbon footprints, and
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eco-friendly products.
For instance
, Tesla company has produced a majority of electric car models.
However
, some believe that ordinary
people
can’t make any
further
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.
In contrast
, individual actions
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apart
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of a thousand
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because
people
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world, having a thousand million
people
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awareness of environmental issues and comprehensive ways to protect
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,
such
as using public
transportations
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transportation
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, and understanding how to
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wastes
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.
Consequently
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the biggest improvement.
To conclude
, some
people
believe that normal
people
cannot help the environment; only the
government
and larger
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can solve these problems,
however
, I believe that both of them have led a remarkable achievement. By transforming the public transport systems, involving sustainable ideas, and individual actions.
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Grammar and Structure
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to increase clarity. For example, 'becoming increasingly severe' should replace 'have become increasingly to serve.'
Task Achievement
Expand on the examples provided to better illustrate your points. Adding more detailed examples would strengthen your arguments. For instance, explain more about Tesla's impact on the environment.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve transitions between paragraphs and points to make the essay flow more smoothly. Use transitional phrases like 'Moreover' and 'In addition' to connect ideas.
Task Achievement
The essay clearly identifies the roles of both individuals and large organizations in addressing environmental issues, providing a balanced viewpoint.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have included both an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your argument effectively.
Relevant Examples
The mention of specific examples like EV vehicles and Tesla adds some relevance and strengthens your points.
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