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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. why might this be the case? wHAT COULD BE THE DISADVANTAGES OF BEING SELF-EMPLOYED?

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Today a lot of
people
 want to
work
 for
themeselves
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themselves
instead
 of working for
anybodyelse
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anybody else
, companies or organisations because
of
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people
 like to be free and try for
themselfe
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themselves
themself
for making
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 more
many
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money
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 but being in
this
 way
have
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 some hardness like
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working
 harder and more time and managing a lot of things that it would be much
more
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harder. Turning to the first
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questions
question
,
humens
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humans
are
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like to be free and
work
 so that earn more
money
. When someone
work
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 independently have
this
 right to arrive at
work
whenewher
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wherever
who
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 want without
ant
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also
 there is nobody to tell
it
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 why is that or what are you doing so
people
 get more motivated
for working
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 and their mind is more relaxed and
abbsolutely
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absolutely
 the
money
 that they are earning is more and their account
everytime
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 is full of
money
.
Fore
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 example when
people
started
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 to
work
 for their own company or shop can do everything that they want and
also
everytime
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 they want and they can have all of
money
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that is
 earned.
Although
 there are some problems that they found very soon.
For example
, managing everything that related to the
work
 and working more that could make them
exhusted
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exhausted
. Working alone
have
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this
 meaning that
people
 have to manage everything perfectly and there is nobody else to help or
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corporate
cooperate
 and they must
work
 more because they are a
copmany
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company
 lonely and they have to do the things
wich
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 a group do in a company or organisation. In a company
each
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work
done
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 by
every
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 single person
for example
, a secratory
organize
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organizes
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appoitments
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appointments
 and
post
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posts
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 letters and a manager
tell
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 to
member
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members
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 of
group
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the group
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 what they should do for each project but a self-employed have to do
these
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work
 by
ownself
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himself
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 which is not
a
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simple action. In conclusion, working as a self-employed has a lot of
benefit
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 but
also
 is so hard and everybody can not do it perfectly and there is
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needs
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 to have a great plan for managing everything
nice
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The essay adequately addresses both parts of the task, discussing reasons for self-employment and its disadvantages.
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The examples provided are relevant and help illustrate the points being made.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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