The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales( in various formats) of film from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the annual number of rentals and
sales
of film
between 2002 and 2011.
Fix the agreement mistake
films
And there
are 4 kinds of rental and Correct word choice
There
sales
format
: rentals, VHS Fix the agreement mistake
formats
sales
, DVD sales
, and Blu-ray sales
.
Overall
, in 2002, rental service was the most popular, but 9 years after
, Blu-ray Rephrase
later
film
accounted big portion of sales
.
The use of rental service
and VHS rapidly decreased. Surprisingly, from 2006, no one Fix the agreement mistake
services
use
VHS Wrong verb form
used
film
. However
, from
2007, Blu-ray Change preposition
in
was came
out and people use it steadily. And the number of Change the verb form
came
peakness
of DVD Correct your spelling
peaks
peakedness
sales
was over 200,000, which means DVD film
was the most popular one among of
them, even though the Change preposition
apply
sales
slightly decrease
after 2007.Wrong verb form
decreased
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