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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the changes
of
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in
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 Australian exports over a period of 22
years
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, from 1990 to 2012. The percentage of four countries are mentioned
in
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apply
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Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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, and
India
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.
Overall
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, the data shows evident fluctuations throughout the given period in 3 out of 4 countries. Notably,
China
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 experienced a significant surge in exports in recent
years
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 from 2000 to 2012.
India
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 consistently showed the lowest export rates throughout the
years
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. At the beginning of the period,
India
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 and
China
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 were relatively low accounting for approximately 2 to 3% until 1995. Over the
years
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, it began fluctuating, with
China
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 reaching a peak of marginally above 20%.
In contrast
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,
India
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 maxed at just under 10% in 2010. The US
also
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 fluctuated
throughout
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from
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 1990 to 2000, with a peak of slightly above 10
percent
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per cent
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 just before the
2000’s
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2000s
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, but started to gradually decline in the succeeding
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.
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, Japan’s exports were substantially higher compared to other countries, accounting for the highest share just below 30% in 1990, which
then
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 began fluctuating in the following
years
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, reaching a plateau of well beyond 10% from around 2008 to 2012.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Export percentages
  • Significant trends
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Relative distribution
  • Global economic changes
  • Trade agreements
  • Shifts in demand
  • Market dynamics
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Bilateral trade relations
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