The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The chart illustrates the frequency of humans in
USA
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the USA
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partaking
junk
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in junk
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food
in restaurants between the years 2003 and 2013. It should
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that the majority of people who ate fast
food
dominate
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from
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the range of those who ate once a week or twice a month in the years 2006 and 2013. The lowest percentages are from those who eat daily
and
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followed by those who do not eat junk
food
at all.  The highest of junk
food
eaters
are
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almost 33% found in 2006 and 2013 in people who eat fast foods once a week and
also
once or twice a month.  These were followed by almost 31% who ate once a week  and
also
those who ate once or twice a month with 30%. The lowest percentage is almost 2.5% and it is seen in people who
eat
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ate
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faddy
food
daily in 2006 and 2013 having the same percentage
and and
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followed by almost 4% in 2003. 
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Moreover
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, those who never ate faddy
food
were
also
below 5% in 2003 and about 4.5% in both 2006 and 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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