Last month you had an overseas hoiday with some friends where you stayed at their house. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends.

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My friends, Hope you all are

good

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well

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.I just saw our Dubai holiday

phtotos

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photos

which I

recevied

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received

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from

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Ratesh today.

Firstly

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, when I saw our all trip

membories

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memories

are came

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are come

are coming

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in front of my eyes. I have

plan

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a plan

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for our winter holiday too. If you all

are agree

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agree

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can

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go again on

trip

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a trip

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somewere

Correct your spelling

somewhere

However

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, I received our all pictures but, I did not get our house photos. Those ones were really good

thought

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thoughts

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Furthermore

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, I

wish

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hope

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we can meet again as soon as possible,For

now

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now,

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good wishes to all of you from your friend. Gursewak

singh

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Singh

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task achievement

In the opening sentence, it's better to add a salutation such as 'Dear friends,' rather than just 'My friends,'. This sets a more personal tone.

coherence cohesion

Make sure to proofread your letter to avoid spelling errors, e.g., 'phtotos' should be 'photos' and 'recevied' should be 'received'.

task achievement

Your effort to share personal feelings and memories from the trip makes the letter more engaging and sincere.

coherence cohesion

The closing statement is warm and friendly, which is suitable for a letter to friends.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

98 words

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Last month you had an overseas hoiday with some friends where you stayed at their house. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends.

The Greeting

Government should spend tax money on public libraries rather than public transportation improvements. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsperson or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.otgers argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Give your opinion.

In future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day ? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.